The ongoing problem of an overpopulated world that
needs to be addressed is what Jonathan Swift’s essay, A Modest Proposal consists of.
He discusses the moral issue of Dublin, Ireland, where the amount of
poor people outnumber the wealthy, causing the streets to be flooded by mothers
and children, otherwise known as beggars and thieves. The papists or Catholics are blamed for the
majority of this population due to their religious beliefs of having large
families. Swift’s essay is a solution
proposed in a satire of both diatribe and caricature directed toward the
wealthy people and politicians of Ireland, while criticizing the society of how
heartless and defective their thoughts and actions are toward the poor people
of the community.
Below is a link I attached that is a historical summary of Ireland in the 1700s to 1800s:
I enjoyed the way that you explained the issue that Swift was hoping to encourage proactive action towards. I hope you don't take offense, but I would like to point out a few things to help you with your essay. The assignment is to write an essay that discusses whether you believe Swift's essay works well at targeting and persuading the audience he was trying to reach. The paragraph you wrote does not mention whether you believe the essay was effective or not, simply that it was targeting the wealthy and criticizing society. With that in mind, their is no thesis here. From the sound of this paragraph, the essay is about who Swift's audience was, not whether his essay was effective or not. I hope this doesn't come off as harsh. I'm just trying to provide you with some constructive criticism. :)
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the easy flow of words that describe Swifts "A Modest Proposal". The summary is very well written. Unfortunately I had trouble capturing your thesis. Do you believe Swifts satirical proposal effectively addresses the problems to his audience? What is your argument? Thank you for your blog. I hope I was of some help.
Good summary of the text.That is an important part of the assignment. Vanessa is correct in saying that you didn't include a thesis statement. Your lead sentence is also clunky. Consider rewording it to improve its flow. Otherwise I think you are on the right track.
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ReplyDeleteThanks for your help, I guess I got off track on the thesis. I appreciate the feedback!!!
Hey Darcy, good effort on your opening paragraph. I think you definitely have some ideas flowing and possible directions you could take your essay. I have been struggling coming up with a thesis and opening paragraph. Your opening paragraph gave me some ideas that I will take some time to brainstorm. In reading others comments to you, I would agree there probably is not a clear thesis yet. However, I don't think it will be very difficult to come up with one. You have made a support for a thesis. I can say you have me engaged in your opening paragraph and with a good clear thesis I would enjoying reading your paper. Keep up the good work and nice blog this week.
ReplyDeleteI think your paper is going to be good. I am still unsure what my thesis is going to be. With this story vs. the other story we had to read I feel like it should be a little easier picking a theses. Reading your blog you should not have difficulty picking a thesis it seems like you know what direction your taking.
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